Improvements after Feedback 25th Jan

Here are some notes Kirk made on the feedback we received in today's lesson.

We have received feedback on our 1st episode for or web series 'lines'

Here is a list of the peer feedback we received from the class:

• Sound levels need improving (some bits louder than others)(Mentioned 5 times)
• CD films logo to long (Mentioned 4 times)
• Credits are to fast at the end (Mentioned 3 times)
• Poor acting
• Opening sequence is to repetitive
• Editing of the video is good & works well
• Nice logos, they look well made and effective to the audience
• Poorly recorded narration
• Inappropriate music used throughout the video (including the opening sequence)
• Camera work could be better
• Too many cuts
• Script is too basic
• Poor cuts used
• Poorly planned
• The actors need rehearsals before acting in next video as they don't seem very confident in the first episode (Mentioned 3 times)
• Catchy song works well (Mentioned 3 times)
• The stereotypes are not clearly shown in the 1st episode
• Need more close ups
• Need more core content
• Visual gags of skeleton work well
• Need more comedy rather than drama to make it more comedic
• Continuity issues need improving (Mentioned 3 times)

Here is the feedback we received from Pete (Teacher):

• When the character is holding the polos, there could of been a close up
• While I was watching the 1st episode, it felt as if I was in a theater, there needs to be more use of close ups and shot changes
• Voice over explaining each character works well, needs to be more narration
• Cut to show different characters
• More planning is needed prior to next shoot (rehearsals etc) to avoid bad acting
• High angle show works well, but panning shot doesn't work within the same shot
• Sound levels need improving / editing

My personal opinion is that from the first episode we can see that clear improvements need to be made, mainly do to with the shots, the sound and the actors in general - just simply making sure everything is prepared. Hopefully with these improvements episode 2 will be better than episode 1 in terms of editing and everything, although the second episode is now limited to 90 seconds after a class letter, this should be fine as we had a short script for episode 2 anyway.